In another hand: The foregoing in the Handwriting of Dr. Franklin, were the Amendments and Alterations proposed by Him and Wm. Livingston, Esqr., on perusing the Mss. Oration on Gen. Montgomery before it went to the Press.
| [Pag]e. | 3 [3] | Beyond the usual Place of Oblivion, an Expres- |
| sion obscure. Same Page. And the Performance |
| &c. read. And this solemn Office was |
| perform’d before the Great Assembly of the |
| People, omitting their most renown’d Oretors. |
| 4 [3] | Fames. Fame |
| [4] | Relicts of publick Contest. |
| 11 [10] | Fields |
| Theology: Query. Mythology? |
| 14 [12] | What is placed, &c: the Meaning or Appli- |
| cation seems obscure. |
| 19 [16] | Creation, will not be clear to many Readers. |
| breathe out his last is at last. |
| 20 [17] | ... in vain... investigate. Should it not |
| be... attempt, or endeavour, to investigate? |
| 21 [18-19?] | I speak not this, my Country men, &c. as far |
| as, I feel, we think better omitted. |
| 23-24. [20] | Pomp of War and Pride of Conquest had no |
| other Charms, than ...: Would it be better |
| to say, War and Conquest had, &c.? |
| those generous Americans who stood...: |
| who then stood. |
| 25. [21] | Instead of enable them to give us Peace, and |
| protect us: Would it not be better to say, to |
| obtain Peace for them and us, and Security |
| in the Enjoyment of our common Liberty? |
| For Gratitude: Affection. |
| Part. 2. Page 6. [28-30]. Had he evidenced, &c. to page 8, as |
| far as Principles and Consistency: In our |
| Opinion had much better be omitted. |
| Page | 11. | for nothing except: nothing but |
| 17. [37] | instead of deserted, &c. say were compell’d |
| perhaps by hard Necessity to return home. |
| 20. [40] | Pennsylvanian. |
| 21 | recorded to their perpetual honour: omit per- |
| petual. |
In another hand: The foregoing in the Handwriting of Dr. Franklin, were the Amendments and Alterations proposed by Him and Wm. Livingston, Esqr., on perusing the Mss. Oration on Gen. Montgomery before it went to the Press.